Below you will find a passage that contains grammatical and stylistic problems that render it ineffective. Rewrite the passage in whatever way you wish that corrects the grammatical problems and stylistic issues. Spend at least an hour on the passage as some things in here might be tricky to fix. This exercise is just as important as an essay.

Instructions: Read the following passage which contains at least a dozen grammatical or stylistic problems. Once you are comfortable with the blurb and its problems, rewrite the passage in any way you wish to improve it and correct the flaws. Then submit the rewrite to the computer system as you have done the other papers.

Mid-Term test